Rodent Robbers

Posted on August 30, 2018 by Maggie C

Snap! smacks the mouse trap,
as the spring is spryly sprung.
The trap slaps shut with a jolt abrupt.
Now the deadly deed is done.

Wheeze! breathes the brave mouse,
as she gasps to grasp some air.
That’s how it goes when the cheese she chose
is a ploy plied to ensnare.

Voilà! exclaims the vainglorious vole.
“You disdained and disbelieved
that a twig tip-tapped could trip the trap.
Such a clean scheme I conceived.”

Shush! shouts the shaking mouse.
“It was I who death defied.
Put a plug in your pompous prattling
while we partake of our purloined prize.”

dVerse Meet the Bar: Onomatopoeia 

About Maggie C

Stained glass artist, writer, respecter of life.
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27 Responses to Rodent Robbers

  1. rothpoetry says:
    August 30, 2018 at 5:54 pm

    Nicely done…. I heard that trap snap! Mouse’s last meal!

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  2. Victoria Stuart says:
    August 30, 2018 at 6:22 pm

    Ah, even with “slyly sprung” I was so surprised by the twist at the end — just as my horrified heart was imagining the brutal murder! Love it!

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  3. V.J. Knutson says:
    August 30, 2018 at 7:19 pm

    Very good – effective use of sounds and alliterations. Love the tale.

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  4. Anonymous says:
    August 30, 2018 at 7:30 pm

    Once again you made me smile. 😀

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  5. Singledust says:
    August 30, 2018 at 9:18 pm

    i felt the spring and the jolt – good use of words that made clear vivid sounds

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  6. Janice says:
    August 31, 2018 at 5:16 am

    An amusing story and love your use of onomatopoeia.

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  7. Frank Hubeny says:
    August 31, 2018 at 8:19 am

    Nice sound. I especially liked these lines: “That’s how it goes when the cheese she chose
    is a ploy plied to ensnare.”

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  8. syncwithdeep says:
    August 31, 2018 at 9:11 am

    beautiful use of the sounds especially the voila..

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  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    August 31, 2018 at 1:06 pm

    Oh great no crackle of bones for the mouse… I can hear that trap, snapping.

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  10. navasolanature says:
    August 31, 2018 at 2:15 pm

    Wow, a snap trap of a poem. And Voila too. Never thought of that.

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  11. jillys2016 says:
    August 31, 2018 at 3:14 pm

    Marvelous voice you put to this!

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  12. Susan St.Pierre says:
    September 3, 2018 at 10:01 am

    Nice! Loved the plot twist!

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  13. ... says:
    September 3, 2018 at 5:09 pm

    Love the poem. The mouse lives another day.

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